Comments on Invite Wording

Hi All,

We were just wondering if everyone would look over our invite text, generated from one of the online ordering sites. It's very simple wording..

We aren't 100% sure about the wording. (ie, it doesn't mention the 'cocktail hour' by name, etc) Basically, what is 'normal' wording nowadays? We know that it can be anything we want, but just want to make sure we aren't making any obvious mistakes.

Thanks!!

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From the Birchcraft Cherished Hearts book:
Invitation Style number: C746
Response Style number: C4601E
Reception Style number: C4601R
Liner color: Periwinkle
Font color: Periwinkle
Type of Font: Photoscript 59


Wording for invitation (verse # F1):

Line 1: Mr. and Mrs. xxxxxxxxxx
Line 2: request the honour of your presence
Line 3: at the marriage of their daughter
Line 4: xxxxxxx
Line 5: to
Line 6: xxxxxxxxxxx
Line 7: on Friday, the nineteenth of August
Line 8: Two thousand and five
Line 9: at five o'clock in the afternoon
Line 10: Saint Mary's Roman Catholic Church
Line 11: 118 West Main Street
Line 12: East Islip, New York

Wording for response:
Line 1: The favour of a reply is requested
Line 2: before July 15, 2005
Line 3: M _______________
Line 4: will attend ___
Line 5: will not attend ___

Wording for reception: (verse R8)
Line 1: Please join us for a reception
Line 2: at eight thirty in the evening
Line 3: Westbury Manor
Line 4: South Side of Jericho Turnpike
Line 5: Westbury, NY 11590

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No thoughts?
FH was so dissapointed after posting this when no one responded.

We really would like to some opinions if anyone has an thoughts on this. Does it sound alright?

Sounds fine.

Changes I'd make:
- half after eight o'clock in the evening
- spell out New York
- delete ZIP code

You could also delete the street addresses for both the church and reception if you're including separate direction cards.

good luck!

Yea i think it looks funny also with just 'Two' starting with a capital.
Thanks

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Posted by lilacwine

Sounds fine.

Changes I'd make:
- half after eight o'clock in the evening
- spell out New York
- delete ZIP code

You could also delete the street addresses for both the church and reception if you're including separate direction cards.

good luck!

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It is funny you say to spellout NY cause FH and I had a dissagreement about that. I said spell it out and he said not to.

I would make it five o'clock in the evening instead of afternoon.

I would also spell out 'New York' on the reception card and delete the zip code. I also agree about the 'half after eight o'clock' as well.

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Posted by jenniesunshine

I would make it five o'clock in the evening instead of afternoon.

I would also spell out 'New York' on the reception card and delete the zip code. I also agree about the 'half after eight o'clock' as well.

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Oh i didn't even realize that I had the afternoon instead of evening. I must have read this thing about 10 times! Thanks for pointing these things out for me

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Posted by jenniesunshine

I would make it five o'clock in the evening instead of afternoon.

I would also spell out 'New York' on the reception card and delete the zip code. I also agree about the 'half after eight o'clock' as well.

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Technically it is five o'clock is afternoon. It is not evening until after six. that is what my invitation person told me. Ours say five o'clock in the afternoon.

Eveything else looks good. I just agree with everyone else, leave out the zip code and spell out NY.

Thanks for the help girls. We are having a cocktail hour so we are going to add that in and get rid of the stuff you all suggested. FH parents don't want their names on it since they didn't contribute, but I thought it would be nice to put it on. I guess is they really don't want it we will just leave their names off.

Thanks for the help girls.

Did any of you order invites online? Did you have any trouble?