Does my invite wording sound ok

brittndave Posted: Feb 27, 2010 06:25 PM

Does my invite wording sound ok

together with their parents

Brittany Leigh Wood
and
David Michael Travis

invite you to share in their celebration
of lifelong love and commitment
at the ceremony uniting them in marriage

saturday, the seventeenth of july
two thousand ten
at half past six o’clock in the evening

bridgeview yacht club
80 waterfront boulevard
island park, new york

reception immediately following

happychelle Posted: Feb 27, 2010 06:27 PM

Re: Does my invite wording sound ok

Perfect!

20mrsc10 Posted: Feb 27, 2010 06:29 PM

Re: Does my invite wording sound ok

sounds great!

StaceyWill Posted: Feb 27, 2010 06:56 PM

Re: Does my invite wording sound ok

Sounds perfect

jmt1108 Posted: Feb 28, 2010 04:59 AM

Re: Does my invite wording sound ok

i don't know why but I like 'at a ceremony' better than 'at the ceremony' but thats totally just a personal opinion. and I might do 'in a celebration of their lifelong love and commitment.' then maybe you can use 'the ceremony' I dont know why, i am just strange this way. just a thought. Otherwise, sounds great! congrats!