EDITED: Please help Proof Read our RD Invite

So I found this poem on LIW that I like, and was wondering if you ladies could help proof read it. Please let me know if any of the punctuation and capitalization of words is missing/incorrect.

By the way, I am using fake names and a fake eatery!! Hope you get a kick out of it!

Thanks!!




Brad popped the question
and Angelina said YES!
All the planning is over,
from the hall to the dress.
Only one thing remains
for this day to be great
“Practice makes Perfect”
June 21st is the date.
We’ll practice the ceremony
and iron out the kinks.
Then it’s off to McDonald's
for dinner and drinks.

Regrets Only
Jennifer Aniston 516-555-5555

EDITED:

How does this look now?

Brad popped the question and Angelina said YES!
All of the planning is over, from the hall to the dress.
Only one thing remains for this day to be great
“Practice makes Perfect,” June 21st is the date.
We’ll practice the ceremony and iron out the kinks.
Then it’s off to McDonald's for dinner and drinks.

Saint Anthony's Roman Catholic Church
7 o'clock in the evening

Regrets Only
Jennifer Aniston
516-555-5555

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Posted by chellynyc

Looks good, I'm using a similar one as well.

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Thank you!

Can anyone else lend an eye?

looks great, cute wording!

one thing..
maybe a comma or dash after 'great'? not sure tho.

So cute! I notebooked it!
The only line I have a question about is whether it should say All OF the planning, not all the planning...

Love it

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Posted by Aug07OFCbride

one thing..
maybe a comma or dash after 'great'? not sure tho.

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maybe a comma would be appropriate?

when you read it, you kind of pause right after the 'great'

anyone else with an opinion on this editing comment?

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Posted by Pinkiegirll07

So cute! I notebooked it!
The only line I have a question about is whether it should say All OF the planning, not all the planning...

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I think I will add the 'of'.

Thanks!!

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Posted by dawnbridetobe

There's no time listed.

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OMG!!!!!!!! You're right!

DUHHHHHHHHHHHH

Now how am I going to add that in??

OK...see original post for edits made.

opinions please?

i wouldnt change a thing! perfect!

So cute.
I love the names as well.