help proof my invite!

i've slacked on this and i'm finally ready to order, but i'm just looking for another pair of eyes to make sure i'm typo-less thanks ladies!!

yup!! everyone raves about them, so i feel very comfortable ordering from them. i'm just terrible at making decisions, so i'm having a hard time actually hitting the order button

Looks good to me

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Posted by rfilipofornow

yup!! everyone raves about them, so i feel very comfortable ordering from them. i'm just terrible at making decisions, so i'm having a hard time actually hitting the order button

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That was me too Good luck. I'm sure they will be beautiful!

Looks good!! They are beautiful invitations.

~dancer and chef~
charlotte and michael

OK, so I am an anal former English major, lol, and something sounds off to me...'invite you to share with our children' With the long sentence before it, it sounds a little confusing. I think you may need to say what you want them to share in, as in: 'share in our joy at the marriage of our children...names...as they begin their new life together' or 'invite you to join our children...names...as they exchange marriage vows...'

Hope you don;t mind my critique...I'm a little crazy, but HTH!!!

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Posted by robinandjoe

OK, so I am an anal former English major, lol, and something sounds off to me...'invite you to share with our children' With the long sentence before it, it sounds a little confusing. I think you may need to say what you want them to share in, as in: 'share in our joy at the marriage of our children...names...as they begin their new life together' or 'invite you to join our children...names...as they exchange marriage vows...'

Hope you don;t mind my critique...I'm a little crazy, but HTH!!!

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I'm sorry, but I totally agree. I do think the wording is a bit off. I don't see any typos though!

Hello twin everything. Your invitation looks good and NO typos....
I do however agree with RobinandJoe's comment but don't sweat too much about it no one will be as nit picky as we are being.

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Posted by robinandjoe

OK, so I am an anal former English major, lol, and something sounds off to me...'invite you to share with our children' With the long sentence before it, it sounds a little confusing. I think you may need to say what you want them to share in, as in: 'share in our joy at the marriage of our children...names...as they begin their new life together' or 'invite you to join our children...names...as they exchange marriage vows...'

Hope you don;t mind my critique...I'm a little crazy, but HTH!!!

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Yup! Sounds better!! Love the invites!! Great job!

OHHH i love your invites!!!!! Something about the first sentence does not flow smoothly maybe it;s just me but what if you made it

Because you have shared in their lives with your friendship and love,

Wow that font looks familiar..... Great job on the invites!

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Posted by robinandjoe

OK, so I am an anal former English major, lol, and something sounds off to me...'invite you to share with our children' With the long sentence before it, it sounds a little confusing. I think you may need to say what you want them to share in, as in: 'share in our joy at the marriage of our children...names...as they begin their new life together' or 'invite you to join our children...names...as they exchange marriage vows...'

Hope you don;t mind my critique...I'm a little crazy, but HTH!!!

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no, i don't mind at all - after all the revisions i went through (my mom couldn't decide if she wanted it to sound like they paid - which they did - or not. this is like, the 7th version of text. . . ), i knew i would screw something up and you're right - it should totally be 'invite you to join our children as they exchange marriage vows.'

thanks for the help everyone!