Invitation question

How does this sound?


Christine Lynn Miller
and
Anthony John Toth
invite you to share in the joy of
the beginning of their new life
together
as they exchange marriage
vows
on Thursday, August
the
twenty seventh
Two thousand and nine
at six o’clock in the evening
The Riviera
East Shore Drive
Massapequa, New York

I think it sounds good, but would you be formatting it like it is here? I'm not sure how I feel about the separation of the lines this way if so. I would do it maybe like this:

Christine Lynn Miller
and
Anthony John Toth
invite you to share in the joy of
the beginning of their new life together
as they exchange marriage vows
on Thursday, August the twenty seventh
Two thousand and nine
at six o’clock in the evening
The Riviera
East Shore Drive
Massapequa, New York

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Posted by coldasice217

I think it sounds good, but would you be formatting it like it is here? I'm not sure how I feel about the separation of the lines this way if so. I would do it maybe like this:

Christine Lynn Miller
and
Anthony John Toth
invite you to share in the joy of
the beginning of their new life together
as they exchange marriage vows
on Thursday, August the twenty seventh
Two thousand and nine
at six o’clock in the evening
The Riviera
East Shore Drive
Massapequa, New York

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Thats the thing the template for my invitation wont let me fit it that way and this is why Im asking

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Posted by gina409

ok im no expert but if it was me i would put invite u to share in their joy as they begin their new life together..just me though i have no idea about invitations

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I like that way too

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Posted by kristentinnelly

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Posted by gina409

ok im no expert but if it was me i would put invite u to share in their joy as they begin their new life together..just me though i have no idea about invitations

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I like that way too

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II cpoied this from a sample I got,lol but, they did have it that way. More people I asked they liked the version I printed.... now Im thinking