We just left the invitation place and i'm not sure this sounds right...
Stephanie XXXXX and Michael XXXXX together with their parents invite you to share with us a celebration of our love as we exchange vows
....blah blah the rest is fine...i'm not sure it sounds right, should 'their' be 'our' and 'us' be 'them'?
help please!
JulesMarie27
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I've usually gotten invites that say... 'together along with their parents' first....but the way you have it works too!
Eunified
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We just left the invitation place and i'm not sure this sounds right...
Stephanie XXXXX and Michael XXXXX together with their parents invite you to share with us a celebration of our love as we exchange vows
....blah blah the rest is fine...i'm not sure it sounds right, should 'their' be 'our' and 'us' be 'them'?
help please!
I think that the 'us' part is what is making it sound weird.. I would just change it to 'invite you to share in a celebration of love'
MsRtoMrsK
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Posted by StephandMike
We just left the invitation place and i'm not sure this sounds right...
Stephanie XXXXX and Michael XXXXX together with their parents invite you to share with us a celebration of our love as we exchange vows
....blah blah the rest is fine...i'm not sure it sounds right, should 'their' be 'our' and 'us' be 'them'?
help please!
I think that the 'us' part is what is making it sound weird.. I would just change it to 'invite you to share in a celebration of love'
I agree with this....the 'us' sounds weird...
LoVeAtFirstSite
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The us is definitely awkward
StephandMike
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yes thank you girls! i thought so too...Eunified: i agree it is the 'us' that makes it sound weird. thanks for the suggestion ''invite you to share in a celebration of love' sounds so much better! thanks so much! it was driving me crazy! lol.
Jill52787
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I would keep it in either first or third person.
Ex. Use 'our parents' 'as we exchange' or 'their parents' 'as they exchange'
just the teacher in me lol
mjm2012
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what about something like:
together with our parents Stephanie XXXXX and Michael XXXXX invite you to share a celebration of love
KroertGS
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Posted by Jill52787
I would keep it in either first or third person.
Ex. Use 'our parents' 'as we exchange' or 'their parents' 'as they exchange'
just the teacher in me lol
THIS!!!! I'm a stickler for correct grammar. It's the court reporter in me. LOL
