Invite wording again

Ok, so I just posted my invite drafts. but I am not really thirlled with the wording. I think it's too formal.

I found an invite online and I mofified it to suit us.
Which do you like better?


1
Because you shared in our lives
By your friendship and love, we

Jennifer L*******
and
Christopher V*********

Invite you to share with us
As we exchange our wedding vows
And begin our new life together (or is it lives?)

On Saturday, the sixth of October
Two Thousand Seven
At 3'O'clock in the afternoon

St. Joan of Arc Church

(Can you start a sentence with because? It doesn't seem right, but it was listed online like that)

2.
The honour of your presence is requested
at the marriage of

Jennifer L********
and
Christopher V********

Saturday, The Sixth Of October
Two Thousand and Seven
At 3 O'clock

St. Joan of Arc Church
Jackson Heights, NY



Thanks ladies!

I am using a variation of #2, but if you like #1 better, go for that! It sounds very pretty. And I've seen it before where it says 'Because you have shared in our ....' to start off the invite.

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Posted by MrsQ-in2007

I am using a variation of #2, but if you like #1 better, go for that! It sounds very pretty. And I've seen it before where it says 'Because you have shared in our ....' to start off the invite.

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You always have such great comments...thanks..

I am lookign for somethign not so formal and a little personal.

My Mom hates the first one.

Care to share yours??????????\


Thanks

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Posted by Regal Beagle

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Posted by MrsQ-in2007

I am using a variation of #2, but if you like #1 better, go for that! It sounds very pretty. And I've seen it before where it says 'Because you have shared in our ....' to start off the invite.

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You always have such great comments...thanks..

I am lookign for somethign not so formal and a little personal.

My Mom hates the first one.

Care to share yours??????????\


Thanks

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You are too sweet!

I don't think you'll like mine for yourself (it's plain/formal), but here it is:

Together with their parents

Yesenia ________
and
Luis _________

request the honour of your presence
at the Nuptial Mass uniting them
in Holy Matrimony
Friday, the twelfth of October
Two thousand seven
at __ o'clock in the afternoon

_______ Catholic Church
Street Addres, City, State

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Posted by wassersh

This is completely unrelated to the invitation topic. I was doing a search on alterations for wedding dresses. I came across a posting of yours from 3/07 regarding a seamstress in the Bronx on White Plains Road. I would really like to find out her details. I work right near there, it would be great. Thanks so much. Good luck with the invitation. I'm still not at that part of the planning yet, yikes.

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Me???????????????????

I don't think that was me. I never go to the Bronx. Sorry!

I like #1 it makes it more personable. and yes you can start it with Because