_______ take this ring as a symbol of my trust, respect and my love for you.
I think i like this way better. It flows better. Thanks for your help. The ones at the church were really bad. I felt like i was in court in the 1920s, with the wording they had.
sassy2611
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For those of you who vote to change it, please give advice. Thanks in advance...
RedHead
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I can't really give advise, except i didn't really care for the very end of the vow 'honor you'.
julz33
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Soething sounds weird to me...this part: and with all that i am and all that i have i honor you. I like the beginning though.
sassy2611
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They did sound a little off thanks for your help. I edited it to just the first part now is it to short or is it ok?
julz33
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Something else sounds a little off... I think you should either add a 'my' in front of respect or remove 'my' in front of love...
_______ take this ring as a symbol of my trust, my respect and my love for you.
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_______ take this ring as a symbol of my trust, respect and love for you.
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Posted by julz33
Something else sounds a little off... I think you should either add a 'my' in front of respect or remove 'my' in front of love...
_______ take this ring as a symbol of my trust, respect and love for you.
I like that one BUT i would put the word love first in the sentence...I think it is the most important so it should be first
________ take this ring as a symbol of my love, trust and respect for you
