Jack & Jill party

FH and I are having a jack and jill bachelor/ette party. My sister and I wrote this last night. Still needs a bunch of tweaking (esp the last line) but it's a start:

Jack and Jill
Would find it a thrill
To combine their pre-wedding celebration
So you and your date
Must not be late
By way of this invitation

To a city spa
Dinner won't be too far
And finally a nice lounge or spot
For a champagne toast
That will boast
The couple tying the knot

The (date) of May
Will be the fun day
When all of these places we'll go
Please RSVP
For one event or all three
Further details will then follow

That's really cute! Really creative! My dumb azz would've just sent out a FB invite.

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Posted by brittndave

it's really cute! i think the last line is fine but the middle paragraph reads a little weird

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yes def - we did this at midnight last night so we'll be revising before it goes out. plus we'll be putting a note after it (not in rhyme) to explain a little more.

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Posted by jilliibabii

That's really cute! Really creative! My dumb azz would've just sent out a FB invite.

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lol we're going to send it on evite. only three people out of our whole bridal party is on fb. we have technology-challenged friends.

ITA ... the first and third paragraphs are great ... middle one needs work ... but maybe you can just skip it altogether and just have 2 paragraphs?

it's really really cute .... very creative!

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Posted by AwaitingAugust

ITA ... the first and third paragraphs are great ... middle one needs work ... but maybe you can just skip it altogether and just have 2 paragraphs?

it's really really cute .... very creative!

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I wanted to do just the first one and then let the rest of it be like a regular invite. My sis wants to do it all in rhyme. idk!