Need help with wording/poem

The day after we are having a BBQ at a family members house for close family and some OOT. We are having lunch & dinner there and watching the fireworks. They are right on the water in Massapequa so they can swim.

I wanted to write something and put it with their OOT boxes. Anyone have anything cute that I could use?

Help please....

TIA

noone???

so tomorrow we'll be mr. & mrs., but the party won't end there. Join us saturday for a BBQ and fun and don't forget your swimwear!

sorry, its the best i can do now!

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Posted by jeanyus27

so tomorrow we'll be mr. & mrs., but the party won't end there. Join us saturday for a BBQ and fun and don't forget your swimwear!

sorry, its the best i can do now!

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That was good!

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Posted by Soon-to-be-Moore

I'll help - what exactly do you want it to say - i'll try and give it my English teacher spin... :)

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Just wanted to write something cute. Telling thenm about Friday (7/4). Lunch, dinner, fireworks, casual bbq, only bring swimsuit.

how about....they'll be fireworks on the wedding night for sure, but join us saturday for some more!

wait, that sounds like you want them there on the wedding night too!!

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Posted by jeanyus27

so tomorrow we'll be mr. & mrs., but the party won't end there. Join us saturday for a BBQ and fun and don't forget your swimwear!

sorry, its the best i can do now!

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That is cute!
Thanks for helping

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Posted by jeanyus27

how about....they'll be fireworks on the wedding night for sure, but join us saturday for some more!

wait, that sounds like you want them there on the wedding night too!!

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Kinky!

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Posted by jeanyus27

how about....they'll be fireworks on the wedding night for sure, but join us saturday for some more!

wait, that sounds like you want them there on the wedding night too!!

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Noone else is invited after the wedding, just us

We're so excited to say I do, but the celebration won't stop there. Friday we're gonna party, and we hope that you'll be there
for a BBQ on the 4th, with good food, good fun and a swim
Sit back, relax, and enjoy the fireworks when the sun begins to dim.


sorry.. best i could do..

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Posted by JTsGal829

We're so excited to say I do, but the celebration won't stop there. Friday we're gonna party, and we hope that you'll be there
for a BBQ on the 4th, with good food, good fun and a swim
Sit back, relax, and enjoy the fireworks when the sun begins to dim.


sorry.. best i could do..

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thats great!!
Thanks

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Posted by SB7308

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Posted by JTsGal829

We're so excited to say I do, but the celebration won't stop there. Friday we're gonna party, and we hope that you'll be there
for a BBQ on the 4th, with good food, good fun and a swim
Sit back, relax, and enjoy the fireworks when the sun begins to dim.


sorry.. best i could do..

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thats great!!
Thanks

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yw

We're so excited to say I do,
but there the celebration won't stop
Friday we're gonna throw a party,
and on by we hope you'll drop
For a BBQ on the 4th
with good food and fireworks galore
With so much fun from the previous night
You know you'll want to come by for more


I tried... but I think I made it worse...

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Posted by Soon-to-be-Moore


We're so excited to say I do,
but there the celebration won't stop
Friday we're gonna throw a party,
and on by we hope you'll drop
For a BBQ on the 4th
with good food and fireworks galore
With so much fun from the previous night
You know you'll want to come by for more


I tried... but I think I made it worse...

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thats cute, thanks!

I love to make rhymes...this might be too rhym-ie though :) I'll FM you also in case this thread is dead by now :)


You witnessed us become Husband & Wife
and now the fun begins!
we'll be celebrating the first day of the rest of our life
and it will require your swim fins!

The fourth of July is a very big day
and we hope you'll be able to stop by
for food, swimming and drinks - a proper soirée
and fireworks in the nighttime sky!

EDIT
now that i look at this ... you could change the second to the last line to read 'A fun little soiree' By proper I meant - its 'appropriate' for it being the 4th. but it may be interpreted as 'formal' or you could put in '-a casual soiree' that might be good.

:) either way have fun!