OPINIONS!!! on my ring vows

What are your opinions?

Derek, I give you this ring with all that I have and with all that I am you are my life my love my best friend and with this ring I wed thee, wear this ring as a symbol of the vows I have made to you today and know that my life belongs to you.

Karen, that is SOOO sweet! You are gonna get Derek all teary!

thats my plan

I hit its ok by accident! I think its so sweet!! as long as it is coming from your heart he will think so as well!