Please help with my wording on my invitations!

Ok so Im working on my DIY POCKETFOLD invitations and need to know how this wording sounds,

This fall we will join as one,
With memories of the summer's sun...

Together as one.....

Tracy Ann (last name)
&
Glenn Anthony (Last name)

Request the honor of your presence as they exchange vows of marriage on the twenty-fourth of November
Two thousand seven

Giorgio's at The Fox Hill Country Club

Keep in mind i have the times the ceremony starts and all that stuff on the inserts inside the pocketfold. Also the address to giorgios.

How does it sound? Would ya change anything?
Thanks!!

Honestly, even though you have the times and address on the inserts, it should be on the actual invitation in case they misplace the inserts or whatever.

I would just change is so that 'request' does not have a capital R, change the '....' to a comma after 'Together as one' and change the spacing to be as follows:


request the honor of your presence
as they exchange vows of marriage
on the twenty-fourth of November
Two thousand seven
at __ o'clock in the afternoon

Giorgio's at The Fox Hill Country Club
123 Main Street
City, State

I feel like the first and third line are the same thing-it seems repetitive but if you like it keep it

We didnt do the above-our said

May 25, 2007
at 3 oclcok
St. Brigids

That was all it said

Bumping for more answers, :)

Thanks Girls!!