please proof for me!!!!!!!!!!! ONE MORE QUESTION SCROLL DOWN PLEASEEEEEEE

Rosalind_75 Posted: Jun 16, 2010 11:29 AM

please proof for me!!!!!!!!!!! ONE MORE QUESTION SCROLL DOWN PLEASEEEEEEE

THIS IS FOR MY SIL. I WANT IT TO BE PERFECT!!!!

Should i kill the 1-5pm and just put 'AT 1PM'
DID I MISS ANY COMMAS?!?!?!? IS EVERYTHING SPELLED RIGHT?

TIA

Join us for a
SURPRISE Bridal Shower
in honor of
Sara. B.
Sunday, August 28th 1-5pm
The White House
10-24 154th Street
Whitestone, New York

Kindly reply by August, 20th
to Rosalind at 917-833-xxxx

Registered at
Bed Bath & Beyond and Kohl’s

Wishing & Lingerie Well

halfbaked Posted: Jun 16, 2010 11:30 AM

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I think it looks great! I'd leave in the 1-5 PM. That's never on there and I never know when those things end!

AngnShaun Posted: Jun 16, 2010 11:30 AM

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looks good...

leave the 1 -5 and take away the comma after august and before 20th...

Jtruran Posted: Jun 16, 2010 11:31 AM

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Posted by jilliibabii

I think it looks great! I'd leave in the 1-5 PM. That's never on there and I never know when those things end!

I agree

AwaitingAugust Posted: Jun 16, 2010 11:32 AM

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i think it looks good ... though maybe you want to give yourself a bit more than one week between the RSVPs and the shower (especially because of the idiots who don't call)?

kris_gets_hitched Posted: Jun 16, 2010 11:33 AM

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Posted by AngnShaun

looks good...

leave the 1 -5 and take away the comma after august and before 20th...

Yuppers!

laulac98 Posted: Jun 16, 2010 11:34 AM

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August 28th is a Saturday

Rosalind_75 Posted: Jun 16, 2010 11:44 AM

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Posted by laulac98

August 28th is a Saturday

I know

i will take out the comma

just need to make sure that my mil is ok that i didnt put 'HOSTED BY'

thanks ladies

laulac98 Posted: Jun 16, 2010 11:48 AM

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Posted by Rosalind_75

Posted by laulac98

August 28th is a Saturday

I know

i will take out the comma

just need to make sure that my mil is ok that i didnt put 'HOSTED BY'

thanks ladies

Ok, gotcha lol