please proofread and make any suggestions on my std wording..

this will be typed on the notecard that would accompany my magnet. I need to print these out this weekend and mail them out ASAP!!!

Jessica Stephanie
daughter of Mario and Maria Y****
and
Anthony Patrick
son of Jim and Jimi R*****
are tying the knot!

Dear Family and Friends,
We kindly request that you save the date of
Friday, October 19, 2007
for our wedding in
Long Island, New York.
We would be honored to have you join us as we begin life's journey together. Family and friends are God's most precious gifts and having you there would be the greatest gift of all


Hotel and Shuttle Accomodations
Four Points by Sheraton Plainview
333 South Service Road
Plainview, New York
(516)694-6500
www.starwoodhotels.com/fourpoints/plainview
For your convenience, arrangements have been made for our guests to receive overnight accommodations at a special room rate at the
Four Points Sheraton. The blocked dates are from Thursday, October 18th to Saturday, October 20th.
Should you wish to take advantage of this special offering, please contact the reservations department and mention the *****/ ****** wedding no later than September 18th.
All wedding guests staying at the hotel will be provided transportation to and from the reception location.This is so all of you Out of Towners can really enjoy your stay.

Airport Information
Airlines that we suggest for travel
Jetblue - flights would land at LaGuardia airport (www.laguardia.com) in Flushing or JFK airport (www.kennedyairport.com) in Jamaica approximately 26 and 27 miles respectively from the hotel.
Southwest -flights would land at MacArthur airport (www.macarthurairport.com) in Ronkonkoma approximately 23 miles from the hotel
American Airlines- flights would land at LaGuardia airport (www.laguardia.com) in Flushing or JFK airport (www.kennedyairport.com) in Jamaica approximately 26 and 27 miles respectively from the hotel.

Contact Us
If you have any questions, especially about hotel and travel
check out our wedding website
www.**********.com
and dont't forget to sign the guestbook!!
Also, please dont hesitate to call any of us
Jessica - (917) *******
Anthony - (516) *******
or email us at
*********@hotmail.com

I like it I would just change 'so you out of towners'.... I don't think it sounds good. maybe just put out of town guests....
XOXOXO
Kitty

'This is so all of you Out of Towners can really enjoy your stay.'

'This is so all of the out of town guests can really enjoy your stay'

just a suggestion
XOXOXO
Kitty

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Posted by mskittynj

'This is so all of you Out of Towners can really enjoy your stay.'

'This is so all of the out of town guests can really enjoy your stay'

just a suggestion
XOXOXO
Kitty

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Just get rid of that sentence. Otherwise, you have great info!

I made some changes in bold where they go. I used to proofread all my boss' work and this is how I'd let him know.

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Posted by Jess5790

Dear Family and Friends,
We kindly request that you save the date of
Friday, October 19, 2007
for our wedding in
Long Island, New York.
We would be honored to have you join us as we begin life's journey together. Family and friends are God's most precious gifts and having you there would be the greatest gift of all (THERE SHOULD BE A PERIOD HERE)

Hotel and Shuttle Accomodations
Four Points by Sheraton Plainview
333 South Service Road
Plainview, New York
(516)694-6500
www.starwoodhotels.com/fourpoints/plainview
For your convenience, arrangements have been made for our guests to receive overnight accommodations at a special room rate at the
Four Points Sheraton. The blocked dates are from Thursday, October 18th to Saturday, October 20th.
Should you wish to take advantage of this special offering, please contact the reservations department and mention the *****/ ****** wedding no later than September 18th.
All wedding guests staying at the hotel will be provided transportation to and from the reception location.(I WOULD REMOVE THE NEXT SENTENCE - NOT NEEDED AND SOUNDS A BIT AWKWARD) This is so all of you Out of Towners can really enjoy your stay.

Airport Information
Airlines that we suggest for travel
Jetblue - flights would land at LaGuardia airport (www.laguardia.com) in Flushing or (add the word AT here) JFK airport (www.kennedyairport.com) in Jamaica approximately (I would change this to a time estimate instead of a miles estimate - something like '35-45 minutes from the hotel') 26 and 27 miles respectively from the hotel.
Southwest -flights would land at MacArthur airport (www.macarthurairport.com) in Ronkonkoma approximately (again, I would change this to a time estimate instead of a miles estimate - something like '30-35 minutes from the hotel') 23 miles from the hotel
American Airlines- flights would land at LaGuardia airport (www.laguardia.com) in Flushing or JFK airport (www.kennedyairport.com) in Jamaica approximately (Ditto above') 26 and 27 miles respectively from the hotel.

Contact Us
If you have any questions, especially about hotel and travel
check out our wedding website
www.**********.com
and dont't (There is a typo here - change to don't) forget to sign the guestbook!!
Also, please dont hesitate to call any of (I would take out the words 'any of') us
Jessica - (917) *******
Anthony - (516) *******
or email us at
*********@hotmail.com

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