please proofread and tell me your thoughts!!

for a bridal shower guestbook....

From each of your experiences,
Comes a very treasured gift,
A priceless piece of knowledge exists

Please share with Alissa and Shawn your wisdom
About marriage, love, and life,
How to be a devoted loving husband,
Or the perfect caring wife
Or simply give them some advice
To help them stay married and keep up the spice

Please write your thoughts and gestures
To help them start their new life,
For the greatest gift of all,
Is the gift of your advice

Are you trying to make the whole thing rhyme?

It just seems a little affected, but depending on what you're going for, maybe we can help.

The word 'gestures' seems completely out of place, and you rhyme 'life' and 'advice' twice so it's a tiny bit repetitive.

In general, I like the idea though.

From each of your experiences,
Comes a very treasured gift,
A priceless piece of knowledge exists

Please share with Alissa and Shawn your wisdom
About marriage, love, and life,
How to be a devoted loving husband,
Or the perfect caring wife

Please write your thoughts and guidance
To help them start their new life,
For the greatest gift of all,
Is the gift of your advice

Better? I got it off the internet so its all over the place

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Posted by xxpazzaxx

From each of your experiences,
Comes a very treasured gift,
A priceless piece of knowledge exists

Please share with Alissa and Shawn your wisdom
About marriage, love, and life,
How to be a devoted loving husband,
Or the perfect caring wife

Please write your thoughts and guidance
To help them start their new life,
For the greatest gift of all,
Is the gift of your advice

Better? I got it off the internet so its all over the place

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Thank you so much for being here
to share with us and bring your cheer

As Alissa and Shawn begin their new life
as doting husband and loving wife

they realize how much they have to learn
when it comes to marriage it's their turn

So please take this chance to share
advice, and wisdom - show you care


Ok... I got nothing.... I'm much better at writing out stuff not rhyming so if you decide you just want to put a nice letter up, let me know and I can definitely do that.

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Posted by jenn_eric

I like version 2.0 better. It's a really cute idea too!

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