Repost from BHB: Invitation help

I want to order my invites but I am doing it online so no one is available to proof it for me. Could you guys please help me out and check it over for errors???
TIA

Because you have shared in their lives
Through your laughter and love
Christine xxxxx
and
Graham xxxxxx
Together with their parents
Invite you to share
The beginning of their new life together
When they exchange marriage vows
On Saturday, the sixteenth of July
Two thousand and five
At three o'clock in the afternoon
Sacred Heart Church
215-38 35th Avenue
Bayside, New York

This is the exact wording- I want to order them but I am scared I am going to screw it up and have to re-order. Is is grammatically correct? Should I change anything???
TIA

thats really pretty

It looks good tome

I don't think you need to capitalize the first word in each line.

Because you have shared in their lives
through your laughter and love
Christine xxxxx
and
Graham xxxxxx
together with their parents
invite you to share
the beginning of their new life together
when they exchange marriage vows
on Saturday, the sixteenth of July
Two thousand and five
at three o'clock in the afternoon
Sacred Heart Church
215-38 35th Avenue
Bayside, New York

Usually, I think 'together with their parents' comes before your names, but it doesn't work well with your intro. Also, if you have a directional for the church, you won't need to put the church's address on the invitation.

hth

it looks good, i like your wording.

I think 'together with their parents' can go after your names - it sounds great to me.