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Welcome letter-how does this sound? proof read please!

20mrsc10 Posted:

Welcome letter-how does this sound? proof read please!

Welcome!

We are so glad that you were able to join us as we embark on this new and exciting time in our lives. Each and every one of you is important to us, and it wouldn’t be the same without you here.

We realize that for many of you, this is the first time you are visiting New York, and we wanted to give you some ideas of what is in the area surrounding. New York City truly is the city that never sleeps, and is just short train ride away. In addition, there are many things to do within a short distance of the hotel.

Just a reminder-our wedding begins promptly at 11:30 am, Saturday, July 10, 2010. The hotel will be providing a round-trip shuttle to Jericho Terrace where both the ceremony and reception will take place.

If you have any questions, or need help with anything, please do not hesitate to call either one of us. We have been looking forward to spending time with all of you!

Love,

Kayla and Michael
Lsorrent Posted:

Re: Welcome letter-how does this sound? proof read please!

Sounds great! I'd just also let them know what time the shuttle picks up from RH at the end of the night, and if you're doing a brunch the next morning, I'd put that on too.

20mrsc10 Posted:

Re: Welcome letter-how does this sound? proof read please!

how can i find out the time of shuttle? should i call the hotel?

Clover23 Posted:

Re: Welcome letter-how does this sound? proof read please!

ummm this may sound odd but... i don't think you can 'embark' on a 'time' - i think you embark on a journey? does that make sense?

otherwise i think it's so sweet!
HSsweethearts Posted:

Re: Welcome letter-how does this sound? proof read please!


Posted by Clover23

ummm this may sound odd but... i don't think you can 'embark' on a 'time' - i think you embark on a journey? does that make sense?

otherwise i think it's so sweet!



I was going to say the same thing,.

Otherwise I like it, and I agree with adding the times the shuttle will be running
20mrsc10 Posted:

Re: Welcome letter-how does this sound? proof read please!

changed time to journey and added shuttle times

thanks girls
Im getting Married Posted:

Re: Welcome letter-how does this sound? proof read please!

'and is just short train ride away'

It should have an 'a' between just & short

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