Cookie! I need your expertise! (everyone else can ignore this thread)
PeteysBride
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Cookie! I need your expertise! (everyone else can ignore this thread)
Ignore page 28 which is not showing for some odd reason. Look at the other pages and tell me if all the spelling seems to be correct. I want to get it out tonight-picaboo is going to overnight it since it busted my horns for so many days.
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LMAO ok - I have 7 meetings today ( ) but I will take a look in between!
PeteysBride
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Oh dont worry then! if it has a typo its one with LOVE!
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The last sentence on the first page doeas not flow right. Maybe try something like the number of pages in the album of my heart are unending.
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The last sentence on the first page doeas not flow right. Maybe try something like the number of pages in the album of my heart are unending.
Thanks Cat! I will try that. Ive been looking at this dang thing so long my eye keeps skipping. Thats why I need other opinions.
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Also on the first page you should make it I LOVE YOU PETE without the comma. The comma indicates that Pete is the one saying I love you but it is being told to him so you don't need that.
Do you like how I pretended my name was cookie Hope you don't mind.
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Also on the first page you should make it I LOVE YOU PETE without the comma. The comma indicates that Pete is the one saying I love you but it is being told to him so you don't need that.
Do you like how I pretended my name was cookie Hope you don't mind.
Why would I care? LMAO we alL KNOW I am a mess with typos because I cannot type for beans and my glasses are so thick I make Steve Urkell like svelte So I miss stuff. I appreciate anyone who wants to help.
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Posted by MeNBobs
Also on the first page you should make it I LOVE YOU PETE without the comma. The comma indicates that Pete is the one saying I love you but it is being told to him so you don't need that.
Do you like how I pretended my name was cookie Hope you don't mind.
Why would I care? LMAO we alL KNOW I am a mess with typos because I cannot type for beans and my glasses are so thick I make Steve Urkell like svelte So I miss stuff. I appreciate anyone who wants to help.
DID I DO THAT????
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Also on the first page you should make it I LOVE YOU PETE without the comma. The comma indicates that Pete is the one saying I love you but it is being told to him so you don't need that.
Do you like how I pretended my name was cookie Hope you don't mind.
Why would I care? LMAO we alL KNOW I am a mess with typos because I cannot type for beans and my glasses are so thick I make Steve Urkell like svelte So I miss stuff. I appreciate anyone who wants to help.
DID I DO THAT????
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Thanks Cat for being my stand-in!! I was trying to find a way for the liver in your avatar to eat a cookie but I have too many meetings!!!
Jenn, it looks SO good! There's only one thing I could find that I missed the first time. On page 3 it says 'whose' (as in 'whose watching') when it should say 'who's' (as in 'who is watching').
That's IT! He's gonna flip!!!
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Thanks Cat for being my stand-in!! I was trying to find a way for the liver in your avatar to eat a cookie but I have too many meetings!!!
Jenn, it looks SO good! There's only one thing I could find that I missed the first time. On page 3 it says 'whose' (as in 'whose watching') when it should say 'who's' (as in 'who is watching').
That's IT! He's gonna flip!!!
YAY Thanks!
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Okay, so I'm a huge dork and didn't realize that when you click on the picaboo book to view it, there's a ZOOM option!!! I was like, HOW IN THE WORLD are these ladies able to read what the pages say and make suggestions?
Okay, so now that I figured that out, my proofreading eye has taken a look and found some things to possibly change (I used to do proofreading at this job).
Besides the already posted suggestions above, here's what I noticed:
Page 1 You have 'just wtrapping your arms around me' - typo with wrapping
Right before the last paragrah, you end with ...'I love you' just when I need to hear it most - I would add a period at the end of that sentence.
Page 10 Where you have 'doily on my head...' I would add a comma after 'head'
Page 12 I would change 'THE Red Robe' to either 'The Red Robe' or 'THE RED ROBE' but that could be personal preference.
Page 14 At the end of the phrase you have, I feel like there's a word missing right at the end, or maybe I just didn't get it? It says 'what I hear when you don't' and I feel like there should be a word after 'don't'
Page 20 Not sure if these are lyrics or not, but where you have 'But don't want to die without having felt it's warmth on my face' I feel like there should be the word 'I' after 'But' so it says 'But I don't want to die...'
Page 29 Right after 'You are my Superman.' add a space after the period so there's a separation between the next sentence.
Page 30 2nd paragraph where it says 'you've been there you understand' I would add a comma between 'been there' and 'you understand' to separate the phrases.
That's it! It looks great and I really love the pages you did where you guys are faded into the background. Great job!!!
PeteysBride
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Thanks guys..lordy...I REALLY made some typo boo boos.
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Thanks guys..lordy...I REALLY made some typo boo boos.
Seriously, when you're looking at something a MILLION times, it happens!
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Okay, so I'm a huge dork and didn't realize that when you click on the picaboo book to view it, there's a ZOOM option!!! I was like, HOW IN THE WORLD are these ladies able to read what the pages say and make suggestions?
Okay, so now that I figured that out, my proofreading eye has taken a look and found some things to possibly change (I used to do proofreading at this job).
Besides the already posted suggestions above, here's what I noticed:
Page 1 You have 'just wtrapping your arms around me' - typo with wrapping
Right before the last paragrah, you end with ...'I love you' just when I need to hear it most - I would add a period at the end of that sentence.
Page 10 Where you have 'doily on my head...' I would add a comma after 'head'
Page 12 I would change 'THE Red Robe' to either 'The Red Robe' or 'THE RED ROBE' but that could be personal preference.
Page 14 At the end of the phrase you have, I feel like there's a word missing right at the end, or maybe I just didn't get it? It says 'what I hear when you don't' and I feel like there should be a word after 'don't'
Page 20 Not sure if these are lyrics or not, but where you have 'But don't want to die without having felt it's warmth on my face' I feel like there should be the word 'I' after 'But' so it says 'But I don't want to die...'
Page 29 Right after 'You are my Superman.' add a space after the period so there's a separation between the next sentence.
Page 30 2nd paragraph where it says 'you've been there you understand' I would add a comma between 'been there' and 'you understand' to separate the phrases.
That's it! It looks great and I really love the pages you did where you guys are faded into the background. Great job!!!
Dang, Yesi, you're good!! Humbly passing my editing crown to you!!!
