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Got my Proofs - Invitation wording help

aimerliny Posted:

Got my Proofs - Invitation wording help

Here's my invitation wording:

Two lives, two hearts
joined together in friendship
united forever in love
It's with joy that we
Amy Rose XXXXXXXXX
and
Timothy Patrick XXXXXXXXX
invite you to join us
as we begin our new life together
on Saturday, the sixth of November
Two thousand and four
at half past three o'clock in the afternoon
Island Hills Golf & Country Club
Sayville, New York

Formal attire requested

my question is how to state the time? Is this correct? If not, what should it be?
Stacey04 Posted:

Re: Got my Proofs - Invitation wording help

I think the time looks good..was that a typo in the beginning? You want to to say United, not untied right?

aimerliny Posted:

Re: Got my Proofs - Invitation wording help

Oops...sorry...yes that was a typo. I corrected it. Thanks! =)

kel2004 Posted:

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one more typo - friendship

Sounds good though!
JimmysBride Posted:

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I would maybe change 'It's' to 'It is'

Other than that, looks good!
kel2004 Posted:

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Posted by JimmysBride

I would maybe change 'It's' to 'It is'

Other than that, looks good!


I agree. I like 'It is' better.
dukey Posted:

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I think it sounds good.... although I think you could say 'half past three in the afternoon'
chris605 Posted:

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Looks good - I used that same opening sentence -

HearzBellz Posted:

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I also agree with dukey

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