I need some opinions

how does this sound to be added to the stds

'Need a hotel room?
Contact the XYZ Inn @ (516) 555-1555 by April 20, 2007 to reserve your room. Don't forget to mention ABC/DEF wedding. Any questions call 555-558-5555.
* Limited number of rooms available '

JMO-kind of lengthy. I bought STD magnets. In the envelope I included a business card. I typed the following on the business cards:
Accommodations
xyz hotel
(823) 555-1212
Mention smith/joens wedding