Invitation wording, does this look correct?

Emily X
&
Michael Y
Together with their parents
Bob & Lee X
John & Jane X
Invite you to share a day of happiness
When they exchange marriage voew
And ask Gods Blessings
As they begin their new life together
On Saturday
Two thousand and Four
At half past one o'clock
Saint Anne's
New Hyde Park Road
Garden City, NY

The word 'vows' is spelled wrong and there should be an apostrophe in 'Gods,' but otherwise, it's beautiful!

Mine is very similar to that! I love it.

When I ordered mine, we did one thirty in the afternoon as opposed to half past one.... just a thought!

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Posted by jannshari

The word 'vows' is spelled wrong and there should be an apostrophe in 'Gods,' but otherwise, it's beautiful!

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thanks..... vows was a typo error.... but i did forget the apostrophe.....thanks!

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Posted by julz33

After Saturday put the date!

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On Saturday November sixth ????

also how early should the RSVP date be if the wedding is november 6?


editted to add..... julz, i just showed my fmil after you pointed that out(cause i had just showed her).... omg... i cant believe we all forgot it....

I would put your RSVP date in the beginnig of october
my RSVP is October 1st

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Posted by butterfly20

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Posted by julz33

After Saturday put the date!

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On Saturday November sixth ????

also how early should the RSVP date be if the wedding is november 6?


editted to add..... julz, i just showed my fmil after you pointed that out(cause i had just showed her).... omg... i cant believe we all forgot it....

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Put :
On Saturday, the sixth of November

Hi date buddy

You might also want to add 'in the afternoon' after the time.

Also, watch how it reads in terms of sentences, you might not want to capitalize the beginning of each line the way you typed because of that...

=)