Invitations, help with final proofread...

im not the best at punctionations and captializations....

Emily Hxxxx
&
Michael Bxxx
Together with their parents,
Joseph & Carol Hxxx
Albert & Anita Bxxxx,
Invite you to share a day of happiness
when they exchange marriage vows
and ask God's Blessings
as they begin their new life together
On Saturday, November sixth
Two thousand and Four
at half past one o'clock
Saint Anne's
New Hyde Park Road
Garden City, New York

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The celebration continues
with a reception for Michael & Emily
Seven o'clock 'til midnight
Manor East
Massapequa, New York

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We hope that you will join us
on this happy occasion
and ask you reply by October 1, 2004
Name ________________________
______Accept _______ Decline

don't hold me to this (i had difficulty as well), but...

Emily Hxxxx
&
Michael Bxxx

together with their parents,

Joseph & Carol Hxxx
Albert & Anita Bxxxx,

invite you to share a day of happiness
when they exchange marriage vows
and ask God's Blessings
as they begin their new life together
on Saturday, November sixth
two thousand and four
at half past one o'clock

Saint Anne's
New Hyde Park Road
Garden City, New York


i think there should be a comma in the middle section, but i don't know where. it sounds like a run on sentence to me... does god blessing get capitalized? i don't know...

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Posted by butterfly20

im not the best at punctionations and captializations....

Emily Hxxxx
&
Michael Bxxx
Together with their parents,
Joseph & Carol Hxxx
Albert & Anita Bxxxx,
Invite you to share a day of happiness
when they exchange marriage vows
and ask God's Blessings
as they begin their new life together
On Saturday, November sixth
Two thousand and Four
at half past one o'clock
Saint Anne's
New Hyde Park Road
Garden City, New York

---
The celebration continues
with a reception for Michael & Emily
Seven o'clock 'til midnight
Manor East
Massapequa, New York

---
We hope that you will join us
on this happy occasion
and ask you reply by October 1, 2004
Name ________________________
______Accept _______ Decline

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When you read it, think of sentences. I don't think together and invite should be capital.

Also you may want to say

'on Saturday, the sixth of November'

I also wouldn't put when the party ends.

Also, for your rsvp, have
'...ask you reply on or before October 1...'

Just my two cents...

I would go with God's Blessing instead of God's Blessings....too many s's if you know what I mean. Be careful with the invitation you choose. They might not let you have so many lines. That's what happened with my invitation. Good Luck. Let us know what the final invitation says.

Together with their parents

Emily Hxxxx
&
Michael Bxxx

invite you to share a day of happiness
when they exchange marriage vows
and ask God's Blessings
as they begin their new life together

Saturday, the sixth of November
Two thousand and four (leave f lowercase)
One thirty in the afternoon
Saint Anne's (Church??)
New Hyde Park Road
Garden City, New York

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The celebration continues
with a reception at
seven o'clock in the evening

Manor East
Massapequa, New York

we decided to have both sets of parents names in it... since they are part of it too..

shouldn't it be

ask for God's Blessing?