Invite HELP!!! Last ONE.... See below last post

Ok, so now that I know FH is OK, I am able to get back to wedding planning...
So I got the rough draft for my invites, and I don't like the wording. I was stressing it sooo much...well... this is what I changed it to. PLEASE let me know if it sounds ok...
I really want to keep my Dad somewhere in there....

I HAD this...
Together with their parents
in presense and in sprit
Danicia
&
Robert
request the honour of your attendance
at their marriage......


And changed it to THIS:

Together with their parents
In both body and spirit
Danicia
&
Robert
Request the honour of your presence
at their marriage .....








How about THIS???

So how abotu THIS:
Together with their paretns
in presnece and in sprit
danicia & robert
invite you to share in the joy
of their marriage....

I know I'm impatient...but FH needs it by 1:30 or it's staying the old way...and I do NOT like it the OLD way.... I was working ont hese things forEVER now lol

personally i don't really like the 'body' part of it!

the old way sounds better to me

Anyone else???
Am I just bugging too much?? LOL

how about...

invite you to share in the joy of their marriage

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Posted by Dani777

Ok, so now that I know FH is OK, I am able to get back to wedding planning...
So I got the rough draft for my invites, and I don't like the wording. I was stressing it sooo much...well... this is what I changed it to. PLEASE let me know if it sounds ok...
I really want to keep my Dad somewhere in there....

I HAD this...
Together with their parents
in presense and in sprit
Danicia
&
Robert
request the honour of your attendance
at their marriage......


And changed it to THIS:

Together with their parents
In both body and spirit
Danicia
&
Robert
Request the honour of your presence
at their marriage .....

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So how abotu THIS:
Together with their paretns
in presnece and in sprit
danicia & robert
invite you to share in the joy
of their marriage....

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Posted by Dani777

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Posted by Dani777

Ok, so now that I know FH is OK, I am able to get back to wedding planning...
So I got the rough draft for my invites, and I don't like the wording. I was stressing it sooo much...well... this is what I changed it to. PLEASE let me know if it sounds ok...
I really want to keep my Dad somewhere in there....

I HAD this...
Together with their parents
in presense and in sprit
Danicia
&
Robert
request the honour of your attendance
at their marriage......


And changed it to THIS:

Together with their parents
In both body and spirit
Danicia
&
Robert
Request the honour of your presence
at their marriage .....

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So how abotu THIS:
Together with their paretns
in presnece and in sprit
danicia & robert
invite you to share in the joy
of their marriage....

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I think it works...!

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Posted by evewedsjc

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Posted by Dani777

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Posted by Dani777

Ok, so now that I know FH is OK, I am able to get back to wedding planning...
So I got the rough draft for my invites, and I don't like the wording. I was stressing it sooo much...well... this is what I changed it to. PLEASE let me know if it sounds ok...
I really want to keep my Dad somewhere in there....

I HAD this...
Together with their parents
in presense and in sprit
Danicia
&
Robert
request the honour of your attendance
at their marriage......


And changed it to THIS:

Together with their parents
In both body and spirit
Danicia
&
Robert
Request the honour of your presence
at their marriage .....

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So how abotu THIS:
Together with their paretns
in presnece and in sprit
danicia & robert
invite you to share in the joy
of their marriage....

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I think it works...!

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Thanks for all your help! I hate invite wording!

i dont care for any of that wording but i def see why youd want to include your dad...

for me, i would just name the parents and put 'the late (insert dads name here) and mom's name'

for me the whole body and spirit thing sounds strange

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Posted by FuTuRe MrS MaZz

i dont care for any of that wording but i def see why youd want to include your dad...

for me, i would just name the parents and put 'the late (insert dads name here) and mom's name'

for me the whole body and spirit thing sounds strange

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Thats what I was originally going to do, but it was waaaytoo wordy....

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Posted by FuTuRe MrS MaZz

i dont care for any of that wording but i def see why youd want to include your dad...

for me, i would just name the parents and put 'the late (insert dads name here) and mom's name'

for me the whole body and spirit thing sounds strange

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Posted by FutureMrsG

Personally I would just put together with their parents-I know you are trying to honor your Dad but it sounds a little awkard. JMO.

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ITA.

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Posted by FuTuRe MrS MaZz

i dont care for any of that wording but i def see why youd want to include your dad...

for me, i would just name the parents and put 'the late (insert dads name here) and mom's name'

for me the whole body and spirit thing sounds strange

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I like this option!

The parents of
Danicia
&
Bobby
Request the honor of your presence,
As their children are joined in holy matrimony
On the 4th of Two thousand and nine
At four o’clock in the afternoon
Christ Lutheran Church
189 Burr Road
East Northport, New York


LAST ONE!
I got him to extend the time...
Is this better????

Posted WRONG one! Seee how stressed this is making me?!?!? LOL

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Posted by Dani777

Your presence is requested at the marriage
of
Danicia
&
Bobby

Please join them as their parents
celebrate both in body and in spirit
Saturday the 4th of April
Two thousand and nine
At four o’clock in the afternoon
Christ Lutheran Church
189 Burr Road
East Northport, New York


LAST ONE!
I got him to extend the time...
Is this better????

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IMHO, I don't love the 'in body and in spirit'. But I totally understand you wanting to include your father. There's just something about that wording that makes me uncomfortable. I don't know why!

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Posted by Still the One

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Posted by Dani777

Your presence is requested at the marriage
of
Danicia
&
Bobby

Please join them as their parents
celebrate both in body and in spirit
Saturday the 4th of April
Two thousand and nine
At four o’clock in the afternoon
Christ Lutheran Church
189 Burr Road
East Northport, New York


LAST ONE!
I got him to extend the time...
Is this better????

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IMHO, I don't love the 'in body and in spirit'. But I totally understand you wanting to include your father. There's just something about it that makes me uncomfortable. I don't know why!

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I posted the WRONG one... please look at what I changed it to!! AUGH! Sorry..I'm just getting annoyed now..