Is this Donation wording ok?

So a few nights ago, I posted about donating but attaching chocolate covered pretzels

here are the pretzels again


now this would be our donation saying, and I hope this uploads OBVIOUSLY, it won't be blurry, but I don't know how to show you a word document, so did I make any mistakes??

Thanks!

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Re: Is this Donation wording ok?

Overall, I think it looks great. I'd just suggest a few changes.

I wouldn't have the first letter of each line capitalized. If that's what you prefer, though, I'd keep it that way throughout -- the lines above and below The American Cancer Society are not capitalized.

Also, I'd say '. . . . have made a donation in your name to

The American Cancer Society', so that the name of the charity is immediately above the date.

You've made me hungry for chocolate covered pretzles now, though.

Re: Is this Donation wording ok?

thanks

better?

Re: Is this Donation wording ok?

Looks good to me. BTW, you did a great job. I'm terrible when it comes to DIY projects.

Re: Is this Donation wording ok?

thanks

I tried attaching the new updated one, but it's not working..however I did what you said- looks good to me

I feel like I can create it on the computer, but the whole printing and cutting is the battle I give up on the quickest haha

Re: Is this Donation wording ok?

Odd, because I was able to see the updated version, but now it's gone. Must have a gremlin in my computer!

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That is the same thing I am doing. I am doing chocolate cookies as a lil something in addition to the donation. I am using the same wording.

Unfortunatley I am going to have the donation 'saying' by the guest book and just the chocolates on the table is that ok?

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Looks great!

Re: Is this Donation wording ok?

it kept uploading the old one, then i even deleted the saved file and re-saved using a different name and the OLD one STILL appeared, I bet the gremlin was in my computer playing games with my eyes



the donation card on a table would also be an excellent idea, you're actually saving even more money

Re: Is this Donation wording ok?

the revision is great.