Need Invite wording advice...

Cacarina Posted: Jun 30, 2009 04:15 PM

Need Invite wording advice...

Which looks/sounds better?

Together with our families
Caroline & Jason
request the honour of your presence
at the ceremony uniting us in marriage

OR

Together with their families
Caroline & Jason
request the honour of your presence
at the ceremony uniting them in marriage

**just a side-note...our middle & last names will be included.

pandafish519 Posted: Jun 30, 2009 04:17 PM

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together with THEIR families

coldasice217 Posted: Jun 30, 2009 04:17 PM

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I think 'their' is better, because it denotes the third person and seems like a formal announcement that way.

nraboni Posted: Jun 30, 2009 04:25 PM

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I like the second...with THEIR families

JennyAPH Posted: Jun 30, 2009 04:26 PM

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2nd option

springsandra Posted: Jun 30, 2009 04:32 PM

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I agree with everyone else -- keep it in the third person. Their parents and them

fonz616 Posted: Jun 30, 2009 04:56 PM

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We used 'our' because we felt like then we were inviting guests personally to our ceremony/recpetion. But then it also said invite you to share with 'us' rather than 'them.' I think it is personal preference really but if you are looking to be more formal I think the first one is perfect.

BarbieGrl10 Posted: Jun 30, 2009 05:05 PM

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Mine says:

Together with our families
Barbie
and Mr. Barbie
request the honour of your presence
at the celebration of our marriage

We wanted it to come from us but still honor our parents.