Need poetry help

LA Productions is making some BM cards for me. She has suggested some poems to use, and I like 3, but I need 4.

It will be for my sister, who is not my MOH and who frankly has been a little difficult and nasty throughout the whole planning. Here is a poem Laura suggested, but there are 2 lines I'd like to change. Can you offer any suggestions?

Here it is - the lines in bold are the ones I would like to change - thanks

Our childhood shared has made us
who we are today,
life would have been so different
without you along my way.
I just wanted to let you know
How dear you are to me,
And offer my thanks
For standing up with me.

Our childhood shared has made us
who we are today,
life would have been so different
without you along my way.
I'd like to offer you my thanks
For standing up with me this day.

dub, I can't now, but I'm writing all of mine this weekend, (a different one for each BP member) so I'll just make an extra one for your situation if you want me too.

It'll take me no more than 10 minutes, so don't even think you're putting me out of my way since I'm writing up my poems anyway.

Let me know if you want me to.

Liz

I was going to take out the 2 lines in the middle, but it made irt kinda short - what about this?

Our childhood shared has made us
who we are today.
Life would have been so different
without you along my way.

I want to let you know
One thing is surely true,
I'm glad that you will be there on
the day I say, 'I Do'.

Wow this is exactly the subject I am looking for today, I think that is perfect minus the two lines, Jenn how are you finding something different for each BM? I can barely find one

this is what I found.....

I'll always remember,
no matter where I go in life
that on this special day
you were here
by my side

So if I forget to thank you
before the day is through,
always remember that I'm so honored
to have a friend like you.

I also found this for sister......

Once upon a time,
a long time ago
god gave a blessing to me, a sister
the best friend my heart will ever know.
a sister shares your life
when you're young and growing up
you cant choose a sister
like you choose a friend to love
but when you get older
you choose the friends in your life
and if I looked the world over
you're still the one i'd choose to be mine


I know this may not be a fit as for me either but I figure I may use part so i thought it may help you too