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Opinion on another Cheesy Poem

WeddingGem Posted:

Opinion on another Cheesy Poem

So I feel like everything wedding related has had a cheesy poem either adapted or written by me. So why stop now? I´m working on one for the Favors.

I think we have decided on doing a small gift bag filled with Ecuadorian chocolates and candies. The idea right now (which we´re still working through b.c I want to set it up and see if it looks ok) is to have them set up on the place card table. We may be printing the place card info on clear labels and sticking them to the actual bags making them the actual placecards. We´re considering this because we are already attaching a thank you card to the gift and didn´t know where else to put the place card.

Anyway, I don´t know why I went into all that but . . . Since I´m half Italian we wanted to include a little something italian so we are putting one of the 2 pack baci chocolate boxes on each place setting. (we may attach paper flowers or something to it depending on how it looks). Here is the poem as it stands so far:

As a special Thank You
We thought that we would give
Some chocolates and some candies
That come from where we live
But since the Brides also half Italian
We thought we´d give and extra treat
And so you´ll find a little something
Waiting at your seat

Sometimes depending on the way you read it the line that says I´m 1/2 italian sounds awkward. Any suggestions? Or leave as is?

ETA: The poem would go on the Thank you card attached to the gift bags on the placecard table. I will be doing a poem in spanish as well to see if I can fit it on the card. But this is only if it comes out ok.
soontobecruz Posted:

Re: Opinion on another Cheesy Poem

I think that line would flow better if it were.

But since the bride is half italian

As a special Thank You
We thought that we would give
Some chocolates and some candies
That come from where we live

But since the Brides is half Italian
We thought we´d give an extra treat
And so you´ll find a little something
Waiting at your seat
WeddingGem Posted:

Re: Opinion on another Cheesy Poem

Thanks. Its such a simple correction but I just couldn´t think of it!! Now lets see if I can do it in Spanish!!

AdriandSteve Posted:

Re: Opinion on another Cheesy Poem

sounds great.

'Since the Brides half Italian' I would either add in the apostrophy (sp? lol ) or write,
' Since the Bride is Half Italian'
WeddingGem Posted:

Re: Opinion on another Cheesy Poem


Posted by AdriandSteve

sounds great.

'Since the Brides half Italian' I would either add in the apostrophy (sp? lol ) or write,
' Since the Bride is Half Italian'



You´re right!! Otherwise FH might think he can have two
little j Posted:

Re: Opinion on another Cheesy Poem

i think the poem is really good!!

just one typo i noticed....

6th line should be 'an extra treat' not 'and' ...

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