ordering invites need your opinions.....POLL

I wrote this fro our invites but steve likes a different variation...what do you think......

MINE

Today i marry my love,
The one i will be with forever
walk hand in hand, and side by side
all the days of my life....
Together with our parents we,
Heather
and
Steve
Invie you to share in our wedding day
On the twenty fourth of may
two thousand and 8
blah blah blah

HIS
Today WE marry OUR loves,
The one WE will be with forever
walk hand in hand, and side by side
all the days of OUR LIVES....
Together with our parents we,
Heather
and
Steve
Invie you to share in our wedding day
On the twenty fourth of may
two thousand and 8
blah blah blah

I like mine better of course lol i just think it sounds better what do u think?????
Please vote and if u like please tell me why u voted that way. Thanks!

I think Steve just learned his first lesson HEATHER IS ALWAYS RIGHT...

I like yours better too.

Hmm.. it seems off but not sure where.

I think the 'Today I will marry my love'.. is whats throwing me.

perhaps ' On this day, '

I kinda agree with Steve and see what he is saying.. the invitation and wedding isnt about just one of you , its the both of you..
(although we all know.. its all about the bride..LOL)

Im just not feeling it.. and I dont know what to make it sound better.


Hmmm.......

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Posted by SherinJeff

Hmm.. it seems off but not sure where.

I think the 'Today I will marry my love'.. is whats throwing me.

perhaps ' On this day, '

I kinda agree with Steve and see what he is saying.. the invitation and wedding isnt about just one of you , its the both of you..
(although we all know.. its all about the bride..LOL)

Im just not feeling it.. and I dont know what to make it sound better.


Hmmm.......

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I agree!

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Posted by SherinJeff

Hmm.. it seems off but not sure where.

I think the 'Today I will marry my love'.. is whats throwing me.

perhaps ' On this day, '

I kinda agree with Steve and see what he is saying.. the invitation and wedding isnt about just one of you , its the both of you..
(although we all know.. its all about the bride..LOL)

Im just not feeling it.. and I dont know what to make it sound better.


Hmmm.......

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i don't think by using 'I' it's saying it's just the bride since both their names are on the invite. but i think what makes the 'we' & 'our' sound off, is the fact that it says together with our parents too. but i like the idea of 'on this day' instead of
'today' only b/c you're not sending the invite out the day you're getting married, you're telling them 'on this day' your wedding day. today doesn't make sense.


JMO

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Posted by kristi313

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Posted by SherinJeff

Hmm.. it seems off but not sure where.

I think the 'Today I will marry my love'.. is whats throwing me.

perhaps ' On this day, '

I kinda agree with Steve and see what he is saying.. the invitation and wedding isnt about just one of you , its the both of you..
(although we all know.. its all about the bride..LOL)

Im just not feeling it.. and I dont know what to make it sound better.


Hmmm.......

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i don't think by using 'I' it's saying it's just the bride since both their names are on the invite. but i think what makes the 'we' & 'our' sound off, is the fact that it says together with our parents too. but i like the idea of 'on this day' instead of
'today' only b/c you're not sending the invite out the day you're getting married, you're telling them 'on this day' your wedding day. today doesn't make sense.


JMO

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exactly what i was thinking.... i is referred to i= heather or i= steve... since you both are on the invite saying our parents or we towards the middle....

the invite is comign form both of you and i can be take whichever way....

i liek yours.... the WE sounds to much liek we we we.. liek ppl dint already kno that!

JMO

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Posted by angl2001

I wrote this fro our invites but steve likes a different variation...what do you think......

MINE

Today i marry my love,
The one i will be with forever
walk hand in hand, and side by side
all the days of my life....
Together with our parents we,
Heather
and
Steve
Invie you to share in our wedding day
On the twenty fourth of may
two thousand and 8
blah blah blah

HIS
Today WE marry OUR loves,
The one WE will be with forever
walk hand in hand, and side by side
all the days of OUR LIVES....
Together with our parents we,
Heather
and
Steve
Invie you to share in our wedding day
On the twenty fourth of may
two thousand and 8
blah blah blah

I like mine better of course lol i just think it sounds better what do u think?????
Please vote and if u like please tell me why u voted that way. Thanks!

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how about

Today they will marry their love
The one they'll be with forever
To walk hand by hand and side by side
for all the days of their lives
Along side with their parents
they are invitiing you to share this speical day
On the twenty fourth of may
two thousand and 8

i am sincerely torn on this one....i voted for steve's - but i don't truly love it....i'm trying to figure it out....(former proofreader - so this stuff drives me crazy)..

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Posted by COwens424

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Posted by angl2001

I wrote this fro our invites but steve likes a different variation...what do you think......

MINE

Today i marry my love,
The one i will be with forever
walk hand in hand, and side by side
all the days of my life....
Together with our parents we,
Heather
and
Steve
Invie you to share in our wedding day
On the twenty fourth of may
two thousand and 8
blah blah blah

HIS
Today WE marry OUR loves,
The one WE will be with forever
walk hand in hand, and side by side
all the days of OUR LIVES....
Together with our parents we,
Heather
and
Steve
Invie you to share in our wedding day
On the twenty fourth of may
two thousand and 8
blah blah blah

I like mine better of course lol i just think it sounds better what do u think?????
Please vote and if u like please tell me why u voted that way. Thanks!

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how about

Today they will marry their love
The one they'll be with forever
To walk hand by hand and side by side
for all the days of their lives
Along side with their parents
they are invitiing you to share this speical day
On the twenty fourth of may
two thousand and 8

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i voted for your version, but i was going to suggest something like this..
saying they instead of I b/c i see steve's point but 'we' just sounds funny.
.....
along with their parents
Heather and Steve invite you to share in their special day
.....
something like that maybe?

i like his but, 'we marry our love' not loves