please critique my invitation wording. . . (please, don't hold back!!) updated, one more question please. please see my last post.

if u see anything that should be captialized or misspelled please let me know. or is something sounds funny, please let me know.

i'm doing pocketfolds and heres the invitation part:

Together with their parents
Tricia Middle Last
and
Joseph Middle Last
request the honour of your presence
at their marriage on
Sunday, the nineteenth day of August
two thousand and seven
at four 'clock in the afternoon
St Francis of Assisi Roman Catholic Church
29 Clay Pitts Road
Greenlawn, New York

Heres the accomodations insert:
Rooms are reserved for your convenience
at a rate of $109/night
The Executive Inn
Jericho Turnpike
Woodbury, NY
Please contact the reservations department at
516-932-5555
Please reference
The Bride/Groom Wedding

There will be a free shuttle bus for the hotel guests to and from the reception hall.
The shuttle will run from six o’clock to half past six and half past eleven to midnight

Heres the reception insert:
Please join us for
cocktails at 6:30
Dinner and Dancing to follow
The Woodbury Country Club
884 Jericho Turnpike
Woodbury, New York

heres the directions insert: (i'm going to include directions from the church to the RH and hotel in the church program, shoud i include general directions to the hotel to?)

To the Church:
Long Island Expressway to Exit 51N
Merge onto Deer Park Road / Deer Park Avenue
Deer Park Road / Deer Park Avenue becomes CR-35
Turn slight right onto Broadway/ Broadway Greenlawn / CR-86
Turn sharp right onto Cuba Hill Road
Turn Left onto Clay Pitts Road
Church is two tenths of a mile on right

To the Woodbury Country Club:
Take the Long Island Expressway to the Seaford Oyster Bay Expressway North (135 N) Exit 36B towards Syosset
Merge onto E Jericho Turnpike / NY-25via Exit 14E toward Woodbury Country Club about two miles on right side

Heres the RSVP Card:

The favour of a reply is requested
on or before July 12th

M ____________

__ persons will attend
__ will not attend




thanks soo much taking the time to read this!!