RP: '08-Can you ladies proofread my invitation wording??? Thanks

I posted the invitation wording I had in mind but with the suggestions of a few ladies and an input of FH we decided to change some of the wording. Can you ladies PLEASE proof read and let me know what you think???
Thank you once again!

[Quote]
Bride
&
Groom
together with their parents
[parents of the bride]
and
[mother of the groom]
invite you to share in the joy
when they exchange marriage vows
and begin their new life together
Sunday, the third of August
two thousand eight
at two thirty in the afternoon

Chateau Briand
440 Old Country Road
Carle Place, New York

Adult reception immediately following

no one?

Sounds good to me.

Looks good. Just a few changes:

1. Your names should be as follows, with optional text in brackets.

[Miss/Ms.] Bride'sFirstName [Bride'sMiddleName] Bride'sLastName

and

[Mr.] Groom'sFirstName [Groom'sMiddleName] Groom'sLastName

Either both or neither of you should use the honorific. Either both or neither of you should use your middle names.

(You may already know this and understandably didn't want to put your names on the Web.)

2. Your parents' names, assuming they are still married and they have the same last name: Mr. and Mrs. Bride'sFather'sFirstName Bride'sParents'LastName.

3. I was wondering why only the groom's mother is listed?

4. Remove the word 'adult.' Guests should glean who is invited and who isn't from the names on the inner envelope (or the outer, if not using inners). It is more polite to indicate who is included on the invitation (the names on the inner envelope) than to indicate who is excluded (no kids).

There may be posts in this thread which state the 'adult' portion is OK. I disagree with the notion, as has been implied in other posts on this board, that merely stating 'adult reception' squashes all dissent about children not being invited and prevents the couple from getting questioned about it.

If someone is determined on getting offended their children aren't invited, they're going to contact you anyway whining about the 'adult' indication on the invitation or you will learn of their dissatisfaction secondhand. So why not start off on the right foot and do the correct thing? I also disagree with the notion that because using 'adult reception' has become more common, it is OK.

Thanks for sharing your invitation.

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Posted by blaine08

Did you mean to say 'invite you to share in THEIR joy?'

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Good catch. I've seen both 'the' and 'their.' OP, which did you mean?