whos good with grammar? and do you think it makes sense?

FutureMrs.M Posted: Jan 28, 2009 09:28 PM

whos good with grammar? and do you think it makes sense?

i need this proof read b4 i print it out but i suk at using commas so help pkease!!!

Just a reminder to all that we love
to mark this day not below or above
the most romantic day as most of you know
will be even more for us to show.

We hope u can make it, we’ll see u there
in a special Valentines day to share!

RedsBride Posted: Jan 28, 2009 09:33 PM

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Posted by FutureMrs.M

i need this proof read b4 i print it out but i suk at using commas so help pkease!!!

Just a reminder to all that we love
to mark this day not below or above
the most romantic day as most of you know
will be even more for us to show.

We hope u can make it, we’ll see u there
in a special Valentines day to share!

Wouldn't it be 'Just a reminder to all WHO we love' I was just thinking that cuz when you talk of a person you would use who and not that. Not sure though lol so someone correct me if i'm wrong. Everything else looks good to me!

FutureMrs.M Posted: Jan 28, 2009 09:35 PM

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lol thanks kathryn...i agree but not sure either...see why i need help lol...wait i am sooooo beyond help lol!

Nichole2010 Posted: Jan 28, 2009 09:35 PM

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Posted by RedsBride

Posted by FutureMrs.M

i need this proof read b4 i print it out but i suk at using commas so help pkease!!!

Just a reminder to all that we love
to mark this day not below or above
the most romantic day as most of you know
will be even more for us to show.

We hope u can make it, we’ll see u there
in a special Valentines day to share!

Wouldn't it be 'Just a reminder to all WHO we love' I was just thinking that cuz when you talk of a person you would use who and not that. Not sure though lol so someone correct me if i'm wrong. Everything else looks good to me!

you are correct with the who, im an english major lol

RedsBride Posted: Jan 28, 2009 09:37 PM

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good i dont feel stupid now! cuz i am a teacher...im always correcting my co-teacher's grammar and spelling lol. its so bad

FutureMrs.M Posted: Jan 28, 2009 09:37 PM

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PLEASE see if there are any other problems Nicole...i knew there had to be atleast 1 english major here =)

Nichole2010 Posted: Jan 28, 2009 09:38 PM

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Posted by RedsBride

good i dont feel stupid now! cuz i am a teacher...im always correcting my co-teacher's grammar and spelling lol. its so bad

haha what kinda teacher are you?? im going to be a teacher too

RedsBride Posted: Jan 28, 2009 09:40 PM

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Posted by Nichole2010

Posted by RedsBride

good i dont feel stupid now! cuz i am a teacher...im always correcting my co-teacher's grammar and spelling lol. its so bad

haha what kinda teacher are you?? im going to be a teacher too

third grade special ed teacher. i co-teach inclusion with a reg ed teacher

Nichole2010 Posted: Jan 28, 2009 09:43 PM

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Posted by FutureMrs.M

i need this proof read b4 i print it out but i suk at using commas so help pkease!!!

Just a reminder to all that we love
to mark this day not below or above
the most romantic day as most of you know
will be even more for us to show.

We hope u can make it, we’ll see u there
in a special Valentines day to share!

*Valentine's Day..

and the one part doesn't really seem to make sense..the most romantic day as most of you know / will be even more for us to show?? idk..

maybe im just reading it wrong

FutureMrs.M Posted: Jan 28, 2009 09:47 PM

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does it not make sense to everyone else?

Nichole2010 Posted: Jan 28, 2009 09:49 PM

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Oh, and put a comma after love and a period after above. lol and thats it!

little j Posted: Jan 28, 2009 09:51 PM

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Posted by Nichole2010

Posted by FutureMrs.M

i need this proof read b4 i print it out but i suk at using commas so help pkease!!!

Just a reminder to all that we love
to mark this day not below or above
the most romantic day as most of you know
will be even more for us to show.

We hope u can make it, we’ll see u there
in a special Valentines day to share!

*Valentine's Day..

and the one part doesn't really seem to make sense..the most romantic day as most of you know / will be even more for us to show?? idk..

maybe im just reading it wrong

i am not an english major, but this is where i am thinking the punctuation should go...someone should def take a second look tho!

Also, i think it should be a reminder FOR not TO...but im not 100% either...sorry

Just a reminder for all who we love
to mark this day - not below or above.
The most romantic day, as most of you know,
will be even more for us to show.

We hope u can make it. We’ll see u there
in a special Valentine's Day to share!

Nichole2010 Posted: Jan 28, 2009 09:54 PM

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Posted by little j

Posted by Nichole2010

Posted by FutureMrs.M

i need this proof read b4 i print it out but i suk at using commas so help pkease!!!

Just a reminder to all that we love
to mark this day not below or above
the most romantic day as most of you know
will be even more for us to show.

We hope u can make it, we’ll see u there
in a special Valentines day to share!

*Valentine's Day..

and the one part doesn't really seem to make sense..the most romantic day as most of you know / will be even more for us to show?? idk..

maybe im just reading it wrong

i am not an english major, but this is where i am thinking the punctuation should go...someone should def take a second look tho!

Also, i think it should be a reminder FOR not TO...but im not 100% either...sorry

Just a reminder for all who we love
to mark this day - not below or above.
The most romantic day, as most of you know,
will be even more for us to show.

We hope u can make it. We’ll see u there
in a special Valentine's Day to share!

This looks good too. but if you add a period after we hope you can make it then you have to put a comma after there, in we'll see you there..

and for or to doesnt matter...it can either be a reminder FOR someone or it can be a reminder TO someone..it depends how you take it

Nichole2010 Posted: Jan 28, 2009 09:56 PM

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also, being an english major, i have learned that if its your own poetry..which this is..then you can do whatever you want..there is nothing correct or incorrect..

FutureMrs.M Posted: Jan 28, 2009 10:08 PM

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lol well in that respect i didnt write it lol hehehe a friend did...i just want to make sure my guest dont pick it up and are like 'huh?'

FutureMrsKuehne Posted: Jan 28, 2009 10:34 PM

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i think the last one that littlej posted is the most 'correct'

and im like CRAZY NEUROTIC about grammar

FutureMrs.M Posted: Jan 28, 2009 10:39 PM

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Just a reminder to everyone we love
to mark this day not below or above

The most romantic day as most of you know
will be even more meaningful for us to show

We hope you can make it, we'd love to see you there
on a special Valentines day for all to share

this is it

FutureMrsKuehne Posted: Jan 28, 2009 10:43 PM

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Posted by FutureMrs.M

Just a reminder to everyone we love
to mark this day not below or above

The most romantic day as most of you know
will be even more meaningful for us to show

We hope you can make it, we'd love to see you there
on a special Valentines day for all to share

this is it

ok so that is the final wording u mean?? and now i can correct it with grammar??? sorry if u meant this is it like THATS IT LOL i dont wanna drive u crazy, but heres my grammar change:

Just a reminder to everyone we love
to mark this day - not below or above.

The most romantic day, as most of you know,
will be even more meaningful for us to show.

We hope you can make it, we'd love to see you there
on a special Valentine's Day for all to share!

FutureMrs.M Posted: Jan 28, 2009 10:46 PM

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uk i hate grammar!!! should there be another comma at the end of the 2nd to last line?

FutureMrsKuehne Posted: Jan 28, 2009 10:48 PM

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Posted by FutureMrs.M

uk i hate grammar!!! should there be another comma at the end of the 2nd to last line?

hmmm...i think it's either or...i think that u don't NEED to, but that if it was there, it wouldn't be wrong either...

Nichole, can u help me out with this one??