wording suggestions please!

ok how does this sound?? i feel like its still a bit off (i would like to just have 'together with their parents' but i feel like we should recognize them bc they are helping some...oh and yes we are using our middle names




THIS DAY I WILL MARRY MY BEST FRIEND, THE ONE I LAUGH WITH, LIVE FOR, LOVE


TOGETHER WITH THEIR PARENTS

MR. AND MRS. JOHN
AND
MR. AND MRS. JOSEPH



Jenise
&
Brian



REQUEST THE HONOUR OF YOUR PRESENCE
AS THEY EXCHANGE MARRIAGE VOWS AND
BEGIN THEIR NEW LIFE TOGETHER

FRIDAY, THE EIGHTH OF AUGUST
TWO THOUSAND AND EIGHT
THREE O’CLOCK IN THE AFTERNOON

SAINT FRANCIS DE CHANTAL
ROMAN CATHOLIC CHURCH
1309 WANTAGH AVE
WANTAGH, NY 11793

beautiful!

I would change 'honor' to 'honour'

---

Posted by LuvMyAlfonse

beautiful!

I would change 'honor' to 'honour'

---

ok thanks!

i would change a LOT... no offense. I'm OCD with this type of thing.

I would take the AND out before love (in the very beginning)

I would also move your parents' names up and do something like 'Together with their parents (their names)' and THEN your names..... it sounds like the parents are the ones getting married.

Or i would leave the parents' names out alltogether and do 'together with their parents' and then your names.

Also, it looks like you're having a Catholic ceremony or Mass. I would say 'receive the Sacrament of Holy Matrimony' instead of exchange wedding vows. OR if you're having a Mass I would say Nuptial Mass right above the name and address of the church so people know

Take out 'at' before 3:00 in the afternoon. It should just read:

Three o'clock in the afternoon.

And take out 'and' from the phrase at the top. It should read

Laugh, Live For, Love

Are you adding your middle names or no?

ok how does this sound?? i feel like its still a bit off (i would like to just have 'together with their parents' but i feel like we should recognize them bc they are helping some...oh and yes we are using our middle names




THIS DAY I WILL MARRY MY BEST FRIEND, THE ONE I LAUGH WITH, LIVE FOR, LOVE


TOGETHER WITH THEIR PARENTS

MR. AND MRS. JOHN
AND
MR. AND MRS. JOSEPH



Jenise
&
Brian



REQUEST THE HONOUR OF YOUR PRESENCE
AS THEY EXCHANGE MARRIAGE VOWS AND
BEGIN THEIR NEW LIFE TOGETHER

FRIDAY, THE EIGHTH OF AUGUST
TWO THOUSAND AND EIGHT
THREE O’CLOCK IN THE AFTERNOON

SAINT FRANCIS DE CHANTAL
ROMAN CATHOLIC CHURCH
1309 WANTAGH AVE
WANTAGH, NY 11793

---

Posted by ILOVEBRIAN2008

ok how does this sound?? i feel like its still a bit off (i would like to just have 'together with their parents' but i feel like we should recognize them bc they are helping some...oh and yes we are using our middle names




THIS DAY I WILL MARRY MY BEST FRIEND, THE ONE I LAUGH WITH, LIVE FOR, LOVE


TOGETHER WITH THEIR PARENTS

MR. AND MRS. JOHN
AND
MR. AND MRS. JOSEPH



Jenise
&
Brian



REQUEST THE HONOUR OF YOUR PRESENCE
AS THEY EXCHANGE MARRIAGE VOWS AND
BEGIN THEIR NEW LIFE TOGETHER

ON FRIDAY, THE EIGHTH OF AUGUST
TWO THOUSAND AND EIGHT
THREE O’CLOCK IN THE AFTERNOON

SAINT FRANCIS DE CHANTAL
ROMAN CATHOLIC CHURCH
1309 WANTAGH AVE
WANTAGH, NY 11793

---

Looks great!

Ooh, you know what, take out 'on' from before the date. It should just read

friday, the eighth of august (with caps of course)

maybe put your names at the top
then
together with their parents
A
&
B

that way it doesn't sound like the parents are the ones getting married

---

Posted by jeanne08

maybe put your names at the top
then
together with their parents
A
&
B

that way it doesn't sound like the parents are the ones getting married

---

thats what i originally had but then changed it bc of what someone else said haha maybe i need a poll lol either:

TOGETHER WITH THEIR PARENTS

MR. AND MRS. JOHN
AND
MR. AND MRS. JOSEPH


Jenise
&
Brian


REQUEST THE HONOUR OF YOUR PRESENCE



OR

Jenise
&
Brian

TOGETHER WITH THEIR PARENTS

MR. AND MRS. JOHN
AND
MR. AND MRS. JOSEPH

REQUEST THE HONOUR OF YOUR PRESENCE