Invite wording...

Does this like right? THANKS!!


Mr. and Mrs. Felipe XXXXX
Mrs. Dolores XXX
request the pleasure of your company
at the marriage of their children
Nancy
&
David
on Saturday, the second of April
two thousand and five
at three o’clock in the afternoon
Our Holy Redeemer
37 South Ocean Avenue
Freeport, New York

To help us celebrate, please join us for
a formal adult reception
at seven o’clock in the evening
Bridgeview Yacht Club
40 Waterfront Blvd.
Island Park, New York


The favor of a reply is requested before
February 14, 2005
M_______________________
Number of persons _________
___________ We’d be delighted!
___________ We regret to decline.

Re: Invite wording...

I would put an 'and' in between the different sets of parents..

Generally, when you are inviting to a church- it is the 'honour of your presence' is requested

I would change the celebration bit to.. 'the celebration continues...'

Also- since everythign else on your invite is formal- I would write out favor, 'favour'.