is this right?

This sounds right to me, but you all have such a critical eye, so tell me if it's ok or if I should make any changes.

Mr. and Mrs. Albert Ferrandi
And
Mr. And Mrs. Vincent Savino
Request the honour of your presence
At the marriage of their children,
Nicole Leilani
And
Steven James
Saturday, the ninth of October
Two thousand and four
At half past six in the evening
The Crescent Beach Club
Bayville, New York

Formal reception to follow


PS- not that you all have all of my personal information, no crashing my wedding!

Sounds perfect! can I bring a guest??

Sounds good to me!

I don't think 'And' should be capitalized.
Besides that I think it is fine!

Perfect

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Posted by julz33

I don't think 'And' should be capitalized.
Besides that I think it is fine!

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wow julz! good eye...i agree

I believe the 'honour of your presence' is reserved for church weddings, whereas a ceremony at a hall would ask 'the pleasure of your company is requested'

I have read this in a few etiquette books and invitation websites.

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Posted by xjulietx

I believe the 'honour of your presence' is reserved for church weddings, whereas a ceremony at a hall would ask 'the pleasure of your company is requested'

I have read this in a few etiquette books and invitation websites.

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I agree, otherwise it looks great. Just as an FYI, maybe you should xx out some of your real personal info, you never know who's reading these posts on the internet.

Here are the changes:

Mr. and Mrs. Albert Ferrandi
and
Mr. and Mrs. Vincent Savino
Request the pleasure of your company
At the marriage of their children,
Nicole Leilani
and
Steven James
Saturday, the ninth of October
Two thousand and four
At half past six in the evening
The Crescent Beach Club
Bayville, New York

Formal reception to follow

It's all ok, except Request the Honor....

I read if you're not getting married in a place of worship not to use that line, but the etiquette is up to you.

looks good i'll be there