Please proof invite

They gave us a faxed copy of the invite but I don't want to post bc it looks horrible (bad fax machine). Could you please proof read-the wording (minus the names) and captials are exactly how it is on the invite. TIA!!!

Jane Ann Doe
Daughter of
John and Mary Doe
and
Joe Bob Smith
Son of
Ann Smith and the late Thomas Smith
invite you to share in the joy
of the beginning of our new life together
when we exchange marriage vows
Friday, the nineteenth of August
Two thousand and five
at half past three o’clock
Name of Church
Address
Smithtown, New York

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Hey Date twin!

I think it looks great. I just ordered my invites (Tuesday). I wouldn't change anything.
It is so exciting isn't! :)
When are you mailing yours out?

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Posted by troutster

Hey Date twin!

I think it looks great. I just ordered my invites (Tuesday). I wouldn't change anything.
It is so exciting isn't! :)
When are you mailing yours out?

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Hey another twin!! I want to mail it out the first week of June bc I didn't do STDs and want to give people plenty of time bc of vacations.

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It looks great, I would do two thousand and five in all lower caps though and 'o'clock' is used to specify the hour on the hour...so twelve o'clock, one o'clock, two o'clock, etc...half past three would be 'half past three in the afternoon'.

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Posted by J&S

They gave us a faxed copy of the invite but I don't want to post bc it looks horrible (bad fax machine). Could you please proof read-the wording (minus the names) and captials are exactly how it is on the invite. TIA!!!

Jane Ann Doe
Daughter of
John and Mary Doe
and
Joe Bob Smith
Son of
Ann Smith and the late Thomas Smith
invite you to share in the joy
of the beginning of our new life together
when we exchange marriage vows
Friday, the nineteenth of August
Two thousand and five
at half past three o’clock
Name of Church
Address
Smithtown, New York

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It sounds nice except dont get upset, but... the way the invite is written, the words 'OUR' and 'WE' dont fit in IMO.

I think its supposed to read

of the beginning of 'THEIR' new life together
when 'THEY' exchange marriage vows Friday, the nineteenth of August. Sorry dont be mad. Just that the invite is written as a third party and Our and We do not sound right.

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It sounds nice except dont get upset, but... the way the invite is written, the words 'OUR' and 'WE' dont fit in IMO.

I think its supposed to read

of the beginning of 'THEIR' new life together
when 'THEY' exchange marriage vows Friday, the nineteenth of August. Sorry dont be mad. Just that the invite is written as a third party and Our and We do not sound right.

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No this is helpful keep them coming. I'm going to keep it at half past three o'clock bc I looked this up and it is grammatically correct.

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Posted by J&S

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No this is helpful keep them coming. I'm going to keep it at half past three o'clock bc I looked this up and it is grammatically correct.

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Sweetie, it is not...there are many sites that have this info, this is just one I found on a quick search...o'clock stands for 'on the hour'...not any variation of it.

Telling time

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To put special emphasis or exactness on the time, use the number, as in 4 o'clock. To be a bit more formal about things, though, write out the number, as in four o'clock. If you need to include hours and minutes with o'clock, write it as half past four o'clock or half after four o'clock (but not four-thirty o'clock).
This is what I found plus this is how my brother did it for his wedding and I know my SIL would have made sure bc she is very into details.

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Posted by J&S

Jane Ann Doe
Daughter of
John and Mary Doe
and
Joe Bob Smith
Son of
Ann Smith and the late Thomas Smith
invite you to share in the joy
of the beginning of our new life together
when we exchange marriage vows
Friday, the nineteenth of August
Two thousand and five
at half past three o’clock
Name of Church
Address
Smithtown, New York

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I like it, except the the line that says 'of the beginning of our new life together' reads a little funny to me... I think 'as we begin our new life together' might sound better IMO.

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Posted by eroxgirl

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Posted by J&S

Jane Ann Doe
Daughter of
John and Mary Doe
and
Joe Bob Smith
Son of
Ann Smith and the late Thomas Smith
invite you to share in the joy
of the beginning of our new life together
when we exchange marriage vows
Friday, the nineteenth of August
Two thousand and five
at half past three o’clock
Name of Church
Address
Smithtown, New York

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I like it, except the the line that says 'of the beginning of our new life together' reads a little funny to me... I think 'as we begin our new life together' might sound better IMO.

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I agree that was the first thing to stand out to me, of the beginning of, just doesn't read smoothly.

I assume you like the invitation being in the first person which of course makes it more complicated (vs. the third person i.e. invite you to their wedding etc)

We invite you to be with us
as we begin our new life together
on Sunday, the sixth of June
nineteen hundred and ninety-nine
at one o'clock in the afternoon


here is an example from this website which has a ton of invite wording ideas:

http://www.invitationsetc.com/w_01.htm

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I just saw something else, they should have writtenON before Friday:


invite you to share in the joy
as we being our new life together
when we exchange marriage vows
On Friday, the nineteenth of August
Two thousand and five
at half past three o’clock
Name of Church
Address
Smithtown, New York

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PPS ur going to hate me lol

I would put Son of Ann and the late Thomas Smith instead of Ann Smith and the late Thomas Smith b/c people might think that either they were divorced when he died or that she got remarried and kept her name- unless that is the case.




I double checked this and it is how they do it in the obits (depressing as that is)