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Help with a MOH speech

MikeandJess Posted: Nov 30, 2008 09:10 PM+

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Posted: Nov 30, 2008 09:10 PM

Help with a MOH speech

MikeandJess Posted: Nov 30, 2008 09:15 PM+

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Posted: Nov 30, 2008 09:15 PM

Re: Help with a MOH speech

Jennmolloy Posted: Nov 30, 2008 09:16 PM+

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Posted: Nov 30, 2008 09:16 PM

Re: Help with a MOH speech

09'er crashing. I think that if you take out the word dolls it flows fine where it is. Then she has the aliteration of the B's. I think that when she says Barbies everyone will know she means the dolss and it will flow better.

MikeandJess Posted: Nov 30, 2008 09:17 PM+

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Posted: Nov 30, 2008 09:17 PM

Re: Help with a MOH speech

Posted by Jennmolloy

09'er crashing. I think that if you take out the word dolls it flows fine where it is. Then she has the aliteration of the B's. I think that when she says Barbies everyone will know she means the dolss and it will flow better.

I appreciate the crash

What about the way I worded it? Does dolls work any better there?

Jennmolloy Posted: Nov 30, 2008 09:24 PM+

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Posted: Nov 30, 2008 09:24 PM

Re: Help with a MOH speech

Posted by MikeandJess

Posted by Jennmolloy

09'er crashing. I think that if you take out the word dolls it flows fine where it is. Then she has the aliteration of the B's. I think that when she says Barbies everyone will know she means the dolss and it will flow better.

I appreciate the crash What about the way I worded it? Does dolls work any better there?

It works better like that. However I still think that it will be easier to say and less wordy with out dolls Just my opion though.

MikeandJess Posted: Nov 30, 2008 09:25 PM+

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Posted: Nov 30, 2008 09:25 PM

Re: Help with a MOH speech

Posted by Jennmolloy

Posted by MikeandJess

Posted by Jennmolloy

09'er crashing. I think that if you take out the word dolls it flows fine where it is. Then she has the aliteration of the B's. I think that when she says Barbies everyone will know she means the dolss and it will flow better.

I appreciate the crash What about the way I worded it? Does dolls work any better there?

It works better like that. However I still think that it will be easier to say and less wordy with out dolls Just my opion though.

Much appreciated, thanks!